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Theresa
The animation was just pictures. That was confusing. The artist could improve the story by drawing each scene. From Milani , T Tree's class.
Julian
I like the moral of the story about helping the defenseless. To make this stronger maybe the dragon dies protecting the person but because of the dragons bravery the person escapes and tells the village about what happened.
Story
I like your enthusiasm! The end confused me a little, do they accept the dragon in the end? Maybe it would help to create a speaking character as you develop the film more.
Elyse
Great job on getting me interested in your story. I have lots of questions that I look forward to hearing about as you develop the story. Are the villagers afraid of the dragon or is the dragon an accepted part of village life?Do all villages have a dragon protector? What is the dragon like and how does it interact with villagers? Why are the attackers attacking the village? What do they want? I am looking forward to your Act 1.
Hazel
I like the story, it seems interesting.
Hannah (2 likes)
Great work. Love the setup...I'd love to know where this dragon came from? I'm curious what the dragon wants and why he's protecting the village? Also why are the bad guys attacking the village? would be good to know. Might also be nice to meet one of the characters in the village in your story. keep it up!
Kevin
Thanks you'll get more information as we move on
Hellen
me and kevin we are going to make the story more understandable for you guys and more intresting thanky you so much for your comments
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My story spine
submitted by Kevin and Hellen
To the Director of Pixar and all the staff and members, I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for this great chance that you have given me to learn how to create a story and the procedures that are followed to complete the process I'm so excited being in the program and I'm really happy. I would also take this wonderful opportunity to thank Mum Kathleen for the wonderful support and opportunity thank you so much and I'm really grateful for you mum Kathleen also thanks for being there for me and for all the opportunities.
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Hellen, Kevin
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