Pedro

I LIKE THE CIRCLE AROUND THE HEAD REMINDS ME OF AN ANGEL

Franklin

it is good the history

Christian

i like you idea

Finn

try talking clearer it was a little hard to understand at some points

Story

Awesome plot line and I LOVE that you used character dialog instead of narration. I was just a little bit confused about which character was talking at the beginning. Since obviously everyone is voiced by you, that might be a tricky thing to specify. I would suggest either getting a friend or family member to voice one of your characters Or just making it so that when they speak the drawing changes(Whoever is speakings mouth moves, they make a gesture, ect). Best of luck!

Gabrielle

Try taking louder

Kacey

I like how you had detailed drawings and I think you could have made the beginning so it would be more clear because I did not get what is was saying.

Sara

The drawings are wonderful.
The opening was confusing.
It might help to include narration, not just the characters talking

Mila

Your story idea is really creative! Your character is interesting, but why are they sent to the in-between place? What makes them special enough to not have to go to heaven or hell right away?