Story Spine: First Day of School
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1. Once upon a time there was a creative little girl named Lauren who had a doting mother. 2. Every day her mother would spend time with her and draw with her 3. Until one day she is forced to spend her first day separated from her mother when she is sent off to kindergarten at a new school 4. Because of that, Lauren feels extremely lonely and resorts to her one comfort: drawing. Miraculously, her loneliness manifests into a drawing that comes to life and begins roaming around the classroom 5. Because of that, Lauren tries to contain the little drawing but it runs off and interacts with other students, which frustrates Lauren and makes her feel embarrassed 6. Because of that she breaks down and angrily throws the drawing away hoping it will leave her alone 7. Until finally, the drawing comes back apologetically, and brings back the drawing Lauren drew of her mom, reminding her that she isn't alone 8. Ever since then, Lauren tries to be more open to change and tries to talk to other students knowing that though she won't be able to spend all her time with her mom anymore, she is not alone and that there are other experiences out there for her in school.
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