Mason

I think you did a good job on this story and with a nice conclusion.

Evan

The story was a nice plot. I loved the art good work

Eli

I like the illustration and the general visual style of the video. I am a bit confused how the wolves and the cattle flow into John wanting to be the leader and why he needs to kill his brother to do that. A few of the lines seem repeated in the middle? I am a bit confused that John doesn't seem to get punished for killing Thomas. Also the way the narration is recorded in a bunch of different cuts is a bit disorienting because the narration has some noise behind it which flips in and out with the vocal cuts. I like the development of conflict and the general idea of building upon a story that a lot of people know. Great job guys!

Bryce

I like the idea that took the story of the Oregon trail and put your own spin on it. Good story and conflict. Keep up the great work.