Tomas

I really like the way the story goes, I love that when you think the story is going in one direction it goes in the opposite direction. I loved that there was no bad guy but that all the conflict developed because of the hidden feelings of the main character.
I think we could see the progression of the character and her growth as she is trying to capture all of her drawings, I feel like this part wasn't very clear to me and it would be great to see.
I want to see the story done someday

Nazish

I think you have a very interesting idea here. I like the fact that her emotions are actually projected into the drawings and they take a real life form. I also really like how resolution leads to her feeling better about drawing and expressing her feelings about her father. It was a little unclear to me how she as a character made that change when the drawings themselves played the major roles in the destruction and rescue. I think Kylie needs to play a more prominent role in that battle where she can face her demons head on. I can picture that leading to her succeeding and facing her worst fears which are maybe facing the fact that her father is gone and confronting it. I say this because it seems to me she avoided it by drawing other things but her emotion was still projected into them. If you can find a way to have Kylie let go of her father and accept it, that it could be a more satisfying transformation for her at the end. But I think you have a very interesting idea here and it deals with real feelings and the trouble a young person would have with such a big loss. I think you should keep at it!

Shomari

I can relate to this character a lot. There are so many emotions captured in the art. The sketchbook doubles as a main character and makes me want to know more about its powers. Very creative! Nice job!

Behnaz

Hi, I like your story and how she can't get rid of her sketchbook. I like your storyboarding. Just for you to improve it more, you could bring the volume of the ghost sound and others down a bit. Also I think you could just use music more than the narrative. good work!