Anna

This was awesome! The audio overlapped a lot, and it felt a bit rushed. I really liked the story! The moral was unclear to me; is it to help others? I was glad that Tammy and Jessica lived happily ever after, but the premise seemed unlikely to me, so I wasn't able to fully be engrossed with the story.

Aries

this is very detailed!

Fernando

I liked the picture and the Idea, it was a very good story line very original keep up the good work =).

Hunter

I would let other people talk a little more and talk a little bit slower. In all I liked the pictures and ideas. It had a good storyline and moral too.

Noah

Like the drawings and description. Just talk a little slower and the camera was a little shaky

Meagan

How did she get stuff in her lung
I don’t understand
Going to fast
To many because of that’s

Logan

Let the other people talk jesse🫵🏿

Mckenna

I like your pictures. I think you should try to not overlap your words when changing to the other picture. Also maybe have somebody else speak to.

Charles

You should slow down a little. You could have other people talk. Nice drawings. It was nice that there was no background music.

Mataya

We like the drawings and story. Slow down when talking and make sure your words don’t cut out. Also make sure the camera isn’t moving so much.

Surabhi

Clear voice, Take individual pictures and do a voice over so it’s clear. Who is Tammy.

Gabrielle

We liked your drawings. We also liked how the characters ended up friends in the end. Maybe you could say because of that less so it isn’t so repetitive. Our other suggestion is to talk slower and show the pictures longer.

Reid

I like how loud you talked maybe try to hold the camera still talk slower I like your drawings.

Anton

Your storyline is good. Your drawings are very well done. Talk slower and make the story clearer.

Tye (1 like)

The idea was good speak slower more than 1 person speak clear drawings uncover lap talking

Olive

I like your idea and drawings but the camera was shaky and you talked a little too fast, the voice also cuts off when the clip ends

Kameron

Nice drawings, volume was nice, everyone needs to talk, speak slower

Kervin

the idea is very good

Romel

your going to fast, some details dont make a lot of sence

Jose

Good work

Oscar

That was a great plot twist that the reader could almost never expect! And the backstory ties everything together. Great Job!

Johnathan

i like it its very intersting

Story

I loved that plot twist! I did not expect her to get sick, and I also loved that you included some backstory, explaining why she was poor. My only two comments are 1. It moved a little fast which made it sort of difficult to follow, it would be great if you could slow down the transitions. 2. I'm wondering if you could use "Because of that" less. It felt a little repetitive and started to get annoying. I feel like your drawings do a pretty good job of speaking for themselves and your other narration is clear, so in my opinion you really don't need to say "Because of that.". Good job!