Ella

I really enjoy the art and the message of this.

Aaron

colorful.

Fernando

I like the night sky.

Luis

I like how colorful everything is! The story is also so sweet.

Krista

The story is really sweet. So excited to find out what happens next!

Theresa

The color palette is really nice. I liked the value shading or darks and lights. Good job. Carol from T Tree's class

Evan

THIS REMINDS ME SO MUCH OF THE BEE MOVIE!! This is amazing I love the art. On thing that I feel you could fix to make it look better is the necks. They seem too bulky. GOOD WORK!!

Ian

I like this story, very interesting line. I don't see anything that is unclear. I think you could make this stronger by talking a little slower, the speech was just a little too fast.

Mason

I love this story and how it developed down the spine.

Thomas

I love how you use light around the fireflies in your images. I would suggest having that light dim as you describe Finn experiencing burnout, sort of as a demonstration of execution.

Story

I love, love, love your art! The moral is really good and not overused. I was a little confused at the part with the predator, but I think it may have just been rushed in the story spine and will make sense once everything plays out. Great job!

River (1 like)

It's great to see Fynn again! You have consistently been one of my favorite teams since the beginning, and it's so cool to see how much the simple idea of fireflies as mailmen evolved over the past few weeks. Great art! The only part I found unclear was the origin of how Fynn became a mailman, like how his desire to return back home translated into his job as a messenger. I think the first section was only meant to frame the rest of the story, but I wish it was addressed again in the story later. Maybe after sending enough letters, he finally gets a hold of someone who can take his parents back home, and he can finally gets some more time to rest and hang out with the new friends or fireflies he's made at the little girl's yard. Awesome job as always! :D

Hanna (1 like)

I agree with the feedback given; the art is stunning. I loved the perspectives, and they were really accurate! The lighting from the fireflies was an interesting element to include, and I liked that it differentiated the different bugs, creating a clear image. I wonder how Flynn's family reacted emotionally to being moved to a new environment-- did they show kindness when they accepted this or did they simply have no choice? Both things suggest a lot about the bugs living at the little girl's mama's house... I wonder if possibly this sadness caused by the girl's actions gets directed onto Flynn without him releasing it, and if this could be part of what he learns/realizes at the end of the story?

Isabella (2 likes)

I saw your week 3 submission and I was SO excited when I found this one! I love your art style and the story is very good!! I love the color palette too! Amazing job! :D

Sophia Rose Imelda

Love the framing and art style! Your story is also really interesting

James

The art style is really good and the story is great and a breath of fresh air.

Mónica

I like your art style, your story it´s really interesting :)