Pengyu

I like how you combine your art works, storyline, and the background music together and the combination definitely highlights the movie as a whole and makes people to be more engaged while watching the movie. Besides, I would find the disagreement between the main character and the mother to be a bit confusing, and I suggest that adding a little more detail in the middle or late of the movie to explain and elaborate more on the conflict might be makes your movie stronger.

Kervin

good work

Odin

I love the story and the drawings, i find it a little confusing why he just wants a kite, I think you could make the drawings a little better and go into more detail

Jacinta

I like the drawings it’s very clear

Roen

I like the art and end letters

Sophia Rose Imelda

Nice choice of music! It really sets the mood. The concept is nice as well

Eamon

Your story has potential for interesting character relationships. Personally I would focus more on conflict between characters rather than a story about magic.

Kylie

It is a very creative story. My only suggestion is to next time take away the spine story out line and make it flow a little bit better.

Nancy

This story has a strong story spine. It makes you hopeful for the boy and that his situation will change. I love the moral. It was very clear though a bit short. I think the third act could have been a bit longer.