Erika

Wow I love the changes and edits you’ve made! Turning the lightbulbs into star works was brilliant. I love the way it brought all his classmates together. And the hot dog constellation is totally perfect and hilarious. Well done!!

Nicole

Hi really like this story, love that the alien is the one creating starts, and the design that holds the stars is like a light bulb. The only suggestion would be that when Leo is giving the first presentation maybe at some point have a close up of his face sweating or looking away so we are able too see how uncomfortable he truly is. This was a fun story!

Matthew

I appreciate the imagination on display here! I'm a bit confused by the world as it is presented here, I'm not sure if what we typically regard as common knowledge about the physicality of the universe applies here? A suggestion might be a bit more time at the beginning spent on explaining the setting that the story occurs in. Very creative!

Samantha

I really like your story concept as it's very different from anything I've seen before.
I like the parallel between the alien discovering all that earth has to offer and the students discovering all the wonders and beauty that space has.
I was wondering why the alien was making new stars/constellations - was it for fun (like how fireworks are fun for us) or was it part of a job that the alien had been assigned?
The story flows well and I like that the protagonist gets over their fear of public speaking; well done!