Cheyenne (1 like)

Your drawings are great! I really like how your story turned out, and I think Zoe is a great relatable character. Good job Fiona!

Benedict (1 like)

Great work on your drawings, especially using colors to show the depth of your scenes. I like how the story ends well for the Zoe and the creature.

Jiwoo (2 likes)

Hi Fiona, I loved your art! It was clear, expressive, and stylish :) I guess what you can do to improve your reel is add in just a little more details (dialogue, sounds, or even a little more drawings) to convey your point in a more intense way. Still, I have to admit that I've enjoyed the current version very much and it was so pleasing to listen to your narration. Great job!

Cynthia (1 like)

Your drawings are so clear and expressive! The story has so much character. I think sometimes like towards the second half, im not sure how the story relates to Zoe leaving her dead end job. I think thematically it shifts to something slightly different but still very entertaining to watch. Id also like to see more of how she was how to figure out the deal with the creature. And because your drawings are so strong I think certain parts dont need as much narration and it is already very clear.

Diego (1 like)

I can see how much you've advanced since we saw your film's critique. I loved the appearance of the mischievous character, I didn't see that coming since the story was already so interesting even before this event.

I can see the length of the story is a bit hard to handle and it is a lot of work. With this submission is enough to understand and get the general feel but since I know how well you work I'd like to see it a bit more polished. We already understand everything but I'd like to see a bit more polished to really appreciate your details which make for a fantastic soothing viewing, to really appreciate the change from the serious to the funny moments and sometimes even poetic.

I'm saying all this because you have a particular way of telling the story which really gets deep and to the core. The narration is enchanting too! What a sweet voice with feeling!

To make it stronger I'd definitely keep this storyline and finish adding the ideas and drawings that you think are required, I'm sure you already know what you want. "Things do not have to be perfect in order to be done well", you've already done well and you don't need perfection at all but I'd like to see a bit more, just to add the right amount to tell the story with a bit more details to exploit all your ideas and feelings which are precious! :D

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Marijke (1 like)

What a great story reel! I love your drawings so much. You show very well where the camera angles should be and you really know how to work them. I love how we see Zoe in the end from a low angle, looking up at her, all strong. The characters are great. Zoe is very well rounded. Well done!!