Adair

I love the story of adam and eve and think this is a great foundation -is there a certain element of the story that really stood out to you? Could be cool to expand on part of the story that is most compelling to you and maybe even re-imagine what if something was different! Love the illustration style

Sara

Good evening from Spain! First of all, I think that it can be very interesting to use the story of Adam and Eve to tell another story. I think you should, on the pillars of that classic story, tell your own, since the one you are narrating is the one that everyone knows and that appears in the Bible. Perhaps you did not understand the exercise well, it is about telling your own story, not narrating an existing one. Be very careful when making the editing, since in a moment the sound has been cut off, and try to talk in a silent room, without noise in the backgroung. I think you can do something much better and tell something personal about you, which is what this course is about. I hope you continue working on it and to be able to see something great soon. Greetings!

Jackie

The story of Adam & Eve is a good one, but I'm not sure why you used it for this program. Next time try to tell your own story. If you wanted to tell a story similar to Adam & Eve, that could work if you set it in a modern time, with modern dialogue. Kind regards.

Tracy

The illustration is beautiful! What's unclear is the characters' motivations. I think it would serve this piece if you develop the characters more to help your audience understand the character's needs.

Hananah

I liked the sketches but the story lacks origniality. It was a bit confusing cuz this story is told differently in every religion hence I don’t think it’s a good idea to tackle.

I would suggest something more related to our day and age.

Anthony

awesome

Pietro

I didn't find this story compelling. I was excited about a re-telling of the ancient Bible story but disappointed to see that this is just the story as is. Maybe this team didn't understand the instructions and looked for an existing story.

Pietro

Hey there, I'm so sorry, I thought this comment was private and part of the vote submission that's only visible to the internal team.