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Benedict (1 like)
Love every bit of this story. You have a great story telling potential in you and your team. Loved your artwork from the start to the end.
Richard
Really great story. You tightened up the narrative nicely. It was interesting and exciting. Very well done. Congratulations!
Kwong Yue
The premise is very interesting. The drawings are amazing. You had me hooked at the start. Half way through (about the time after we finish hearing Skelly's background story), I started getting a little lost. I think simplifying the second half of the story may make it clearer. Maybe concentrate more on Skelly and Rachel's character development.
Florian
I really like the story and art. But what I don't understand why Skelly all the sudden helps Rachel?
Chris
Very well done animatic. Seems professional already. Interesting story as well and the artwork is awesome.
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Skelly and Rachel
This is a Story of Skelly and Rachel.
It stems from the idea, what if...the government resurrect dead people to pay them tax till they die again.
The core of this story is questioning 'what do works/ jobs mean to you? Are they meaningful?'
for someone works are just for sustainability. For someone, works are for fulfilling their dreams. And for someone, works are their life. This could be varied with societies and generations.
By following the journey of Skelly and Rachel, I'd like you to think about the relationships between those three; Work, Dream, Life.
Thank you.
# for those who want to look the story spine and narratives that I used in this video, I'll put Google Doc for you.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1J0r7t7NhOXT1TC-Nm_fcDCdd-sVJ5efhwYU9NdHXon4/edit?usp=sharing
My Family who always support me.
Kennedi Watkins who gave me Many feedbacks, and also who introduced this wonderful program.
Special Thanks:
Team:
Moon-Face : Jin Sung Moon(David Moon)
Jin Sung
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