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Sally (1 like)
I was really moved by this story - it was really heartbreaking to see how rough things were for Tyche in the beginning, and when she doubted herself after getting the additional lives, and it made me want to root for her to pull through! I loved your choice of music - it was amazing how in synch it was with the low points and the final part where she Tyche finds strength and determination to help Sara. I was a little unclear about how Sara was hurt or in danger and how Tyche saved her before the final scene where both finally seem to be ok. Really simple yet effective artwork and animation - I loved how you used the tattoo of the clovers made of hearts to show lives used up and three were left, also how you color coded the voices of what Tyche said and Sara said with what they were wearing. I felt all the heart and compassion you have for others who may feel discouraged that you aim to uplift and inspire with your story reel - I hope you'll keep sharing and using your power to lift up others - you definitely have some magic powers of your own! :)
Sophia (1 like)
I feel very touched by your comment Sally! I aim to be a storyteller, and this means a lot to me.
Kamie (1 like)
I like your drawings
Jak (1 like)
I like how you did not need many words to still show the story.
An (1 like)
This was amazing, the emotions, the sketches, the animation. Even the song goes well with the theme of this story. I could somewhat understand the story, but overall it would be better with narration. But even without it, it's still amazing.
MacKenzie (1 like)
I absolutely love this!!!! the story without explaining is a little unclear though
Niccolo (1 like)
Great job on animating it and adding music but I do believe if someone did not read the description the story might be a little unclear. Over good job.
amelia (1 like)
Yes!!! Lovejoy's Privately Owned Spiral Galaxy!!!! This song fits so well!! The animatic is beautiful and simple, which I love. <3
Nancy (2 likes)
Loved the art and music!!
Chloe (2 likes)
I love your animatic so much! the story is very compelling and the nine lives is a very interesting concept. Your timing to the music is so good too!
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Tyche
"Privately Owned Spiral Galaxy" Song by Lovejoy
Tyche has always been so unlucky it seemed like a curse. Her family scorned her. Classmates gave up on her. Even the moon seemed to mock her. She'd trip up and down the sidewalks, always a bandage ready for her knee or elbows.
One day, her unluckiness killed her. A passing witch took pity on her and decided to grant her nine lives, using one to resurrect her initially.
Tyche tried to go to the witch for help, but was turned away. Because of that, she met the witch's daughter, Sara, outside. She was an enthusiast on magic, and excitedly befriended Tyche.
A journey was set to look for magic to cure Tyche, a rather hard one since magic was outlawed in the natural world.
While looking at a map, Sara was taken away by a magical beast. Tyche had to muster up the courage to save her.
Using all but three lives, they were saved. She learned along the way the origin of her curse from a passing witch. It was given by her family, who was originally cursed by a witch they wronged. They compiled all their unluckiness and bad karma into her when she was a newborn.
Tyche, who doubted herself at every step, thought the world was against her, gave up on ever appealing to her family or anyone else. She needed to love herself.
Finally, she left her family, and stayed with Sara while finding herself. As the distance between her and her family increased, the cursed bond weakened, and the karma and unluckiness slowly made their way back to her family.
The moral of the story is that your self-worth isn't defined by anyone else but you. Not your family, society, but you. You have the ability to change.
Lovejoy for inspiring so much of my art.
My best friend always hyping me up.
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