Sara (1 like)

I followed your story through the entire process and I really like how it turned out! The story is clear, linear and engaging, as the drawings. I love the many ideas you had for the intergalactic competition and I really appreciated the sound effects you added. Great job!!

James

I like the full story. I wish you had a little background music and some more sound effects. Yet overall a great story! Keep up the great work.

Samuel

That’s interesting and I feel like it was clear overall

Marijke

Great story and I really love the drawings. The story has developed a lot and it only got better. Great that the brother went of to buy the car and that Marlowe stayed.

Álvaro

Hello! I liked your story. I see it as an animated series. It's very much from the style of cartoon network and such. Good job!

Francisco

This is great! It has so much humor, so many ideas, edit is great too. It reminds me Jared Hess movies (I think his movies are pretty cool by the way) The main characters designs are just awesome. Nice job.

Madeleine (1 like)

Hi Team Hansen and Mario, congratulations on a great story reel! It's really great to see the development of your project over the last few weeks. I liked the moment of temptation where Doug takes the money in exchange to dropout of the competition, it leaves the audience with a sense of wonder as to what is going to happen to Marlowe. What I found unclear was whether Doug cared that Marlowe was going to stay or not? A suggestion I have to make the story stronger would be to perhaps set up a moment of tension between Doug and Marlowe that leads Marlowe to disobey her brother and stay to compete.

Hansen

Great suggestion! In future iterations, we'll definitely work on building out the scene when Doug leaves the show to showcase his relationship with Marlowe, as well as their different world views.

Enkhee

Riveting! I enjoyed your story reel so much!

Christopher

I loved your sound effects and it the story has a lot of fun scenes with the different competitions in the reality show.

Lee

Very compelling story